I guess I was looking for more in terms of problems I was not already aware of though. I need that objective opinion to pick out the things I have not noticed. Show me stuff I overlooked.
I made substantial rewrites before the evaluation came back and it looks like I am already on the right path.
To summarize part of the evaluation, I got high marks for style and believability of the characters. The editor did suggest making the manuscript longer or separating some of the plot into a second book.
While my intent is to launch a series, I am juggling too many balls in this one. I was pleasantly surprised by some of the positive points:
"This book is definitely an entry appropriate for the adult side of the [urban fantasy] category and may even get shelved in the horror section at times, along with series like Kim Harrison’s Rachel Morgan books or the Sookie Stackhouse novels—but that’s a good thing."There are some gruesome, raw parts in the book. Stuff happens. I am glad it works for grown folks. Last fall when it was suggested that I gear the book for the young adult market; I am glad I stuck to my guns.
I must work on tightening the plot and do some fierce copy editing, but I was encouraged about my prospects after I read this:
"Black Saturday has an immense amount of appeal for its particular take on urban fantasy in that you’ve got the supernatural elements and the just-under-the-surface-of-normal stuff going on that “regular” people consider fairytales, but you’ve done it without falling into all the cliché traps of vampires, werewolves, fairies, etc—and most of all, you’ve dealt with magic and spirits in such a way that we haven’t delved into old, tired “witch” territory and have found new (at least, new to the genre) ways to talk about magic that I think will have very broad appeal."